Republic of Somalia

[somalia]

The Character

Country Name: Somalia

Human Name: Aziza Nyhad

Gender: female

Appearance: Nicknamed the 'torn one' by her fellow nations Somalia appears as a beautiful young lady but has a series of off putting physical features that make her appear almost as intimidating as she actually is. Her flesh is a light golden brown color and appears to be wrapped so tightly around her bones that one may think that her skin would tear open at any moment, this gives her a malnourished appearance. Her face is marred by a network of intersecting scars, gashes, and wounds starting at her forehead and traveling down her body. Obsidion colored hair trails behind her, long and flowing like a cape made from pure shadows, reaching past her shoulders and down to the middle of her back. Grassy green eyes adorn her face, sparkling with intense ferocity and rage with just a hint of sorrow mixed in.
Personality:
Somalia is considerably one of the world's most violent and poor countries, lacking in the money needed to feed herself and constantly getting into fights. She has a temper like that of a volcano, it only takes a little trigger to make her explode in a fit of rage, when this happens she will sometimes take her dagger, or any object that can be used as a weapon and start hitting a wall with it in order to keep from attacking the other nations. It is rare to see her smile, it only ever really occurs when she sees something gut wrenchingly horrible in which case she may be found laughing her head off or licking her lips as though she were watching somebody make a delicious kind of food.

When calm Somalia has a typically displeased look on her face and will often times cross her arms while holding her head up high as though she were full of herself. She has been known to speak to other countries in a tone that is sickly sweet and oddly disturbing when calm and other countries can find a slight smirk playing at her lips when she speaks like this. Preferring to be alone most of the time, Somalia will travel with at the most two other countries when travel is necessary, however a good portion of the time she can be found skulking around in a room all alone or walking a good distance behind a few, much smaller countries. There have been some suspiscions as to why she does this, other countries have seen her many times before stalking along behind them with a solemn expression on her face. Nobody really knows why she does this but it is believed that she is actually a very motherly country, trying to keep the weaker countries safe the way a mother would protect her child.

Weapon:
A dagger with a brass handle
Likes:

• Money
  
• Smaller countries
  
• Rabbits
  
• Sword fighting
  
• Affection
  

Dislikes:

• Being insulted
  
• Her Siblings
  
• England
  
• Animal cruelty
  
• Her nickname
  

Strengths:

• Swift
  
• Motherly
  
• Affectionate
  

Weaknesses:

• Prefers to be alone
  
• Has many scars covering her body
  
• Malnourished, occasionally passes out from lack of food or water.
  

Sample Post:

Somalia curled up next to her twin heaving a sigh of relief. "I've missed you so much sister! I really thought you were going to be gone forever when big brother told me you were dead. I'm so glad you're still alive, now I don't have to be alone anymore!"She practically purred with happiness, looking up into her sister's steadily paling face.

"Promise you'll never leave me again okay sister?" Somalia urged, hoping to hear her sibling's voice again. Her twin just turned away, a sorrowful expression on her face as she began to speak "I'm sorry Somalia but..... I-I....." She began.

Somalia's eyes were filled to the brim with confusion. "You what Somaliland?"She asked in that sweet voice of hers. She watched her twin as she writhed for a second before she jumped up. "I want my independence!" She exclaimed, an unexplainable feral look in her eye as she eyed Somalia darkly.

Somalia merely stared blinking with confusion before her eyes filled with tears. "Y-you want to leave me a-all alone again!? W-why do you alwa-ways have to do this kind of thing to me?! Fine have your independence, get beaten up by other countries, see if I care."She sobbed running from the room.
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When Somalia awoke from her dreams of the past she found herself unable to keep from crying. Her sister was the only person who was able to help her. When she was around Somalia felt needed, she was always able to find a way to overlook the horrid damage that her civil war was doing to her because she knew she had to take care of her sister.

She left though, she knew Somalia needed her but she left anyways. Her sister had told her that she would be able to get through the war without her. Oh if only she knew just how wrong she was, maybe she wouldn't have left, but she did and Somalia fell into turmoil soon after.

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The Player

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Hello, and thank you for submitting an application to Hetalia Replay. Unfortunately, due to several reasons (listed below), we will have to reject this application. You are definitely free to try again once the issues below are addressed, and the application in general pleases the Voices. Do remember that you can only submit up to three applications in total, and that there must be a 24-hour waiting period between each try.

As a side note, please remember to reserve the character before posting an application. This is to avoid any reservation drama and complications that may occur in the future. Thank you.

Your grammar, first and foremost, isn’t all that bad. There are a few awkward and run-on sentences here and there, as well as a few spelling errors, but these are easily fixable.

Generally, those of African descent do not have green eyes; rather, they have dark-colored eyes. As Aziza is supposed to be representing Somalia, which is an African country, it would be more understandable and believable for her to have, say, dark brown eyes.

Overall, Aziza seems to be a very typical broody girl. Her anger issues and lack of money could’ve been explained in a more concise manner, and deeper aspects of her character could’ve been explained. What makes her angry? What makes her sad? Why does she never seem to be happy, or what makes her happy? We want to see a three-dimensional character – someone who is believable, and has reasons for acting and thinking the way they do. You may referenced past accepted applications, such as England, The Netherlands and Germany. Also, please note that, in the Application Template, we make it clear that the Personality section must be minimum 400 words. You currently have 314. I would recommend researching further into Somalia’s history, and using that as a base to craft her character. However, you must remember that the OC you create must be a believable person. Don’t flip flop between one personality trait and another, particularly if they are opposites and don’t belong in someone without any sort of personality disorder.

Aziza’s likes seem very inconsistent with her character, which is why it’s imperative that you flesh her out as much as possible in the Personality section. It’s understandable for her to like money, as Somalia is one of the poorer countries in the world. However, it seems random and out of place for her to like rabbits and affection, even if the latter is a common feeling that everyone desires. It would have been much better, for example, if you wrote that she was lonely and craved a friend (though, adding this would mean revamping the entire Personality section, as right now, Aziza seems like a one-dimensional, broody, and angry introvert).

Her dislikes run on a similar vein. No one likes being insulted, so this is a general dislike that adds nothing to her character. Who are her siblings, exactly, and why does she not like them? Why does she only dislike England, and not Ethiopa, with whom she has had similar disputes with in the past (over Ogaden)? Animal cruelty is another general dislike, and adds very little flesh to the skeleton of her character. It would also be advisable to fix that tidbit about her nickname, if only because that, combined with the way you described her, makes her seem overall like a pitiable sort of Mary Sue.

We ask, also, for a minimum of five strengths and five weaknesses. Her strengths do not seem to really match her character, either. You described her as a temperamental, aloof, and almost hateful nation – and only that. She does not seem at all like a motherly or affectionate sort of person at all.

Her weaknesses are also not quite weaknesses, save for the last one. Preferring to be alone is not a weakness – it’s a preference. Some people function better alone than in groups, while others are the exact opposite. Scars are most definitely not weaknesses, either. The wounds that would become scars were definitely weaknesses and disabilities at the point she received them, but in the current era, they are nothing but marks.

The sample post is where everything seems to break down. Grammar seems to fall apart a little more, and the chain of events seems a little hard to follow. Somaliland’s personality seems to flip flop rapidly, and Aziza does not seem at all to be the sort of person described in the Personality, Likes, and Dislikes section.

This application, furthermore, is incomplete. Please fill out your name and timezone in The Player section.

Again, thank you very much for submitting an application. You're very welcome to try again, if you wish.