Ivan Braginsky/Russia app{FINISHED}

[russiansunflower]

The Character

Country Name: Rossiya Federiskaya

Human Name: Ivan Braginsky

Gender: Male

Appearance:

Personality: Ivan may seem like the big-hearted and innocent man, but in reality he is childishly cruel. He comes off as intimidating without even saying a word, his gentle smile and disposition only intensifying the aura of dread which seems to constantly hang over him. He rather naive and kind but can be incredibly cruel minded and he even has a hint of insanity with it..Ivan is blunt with others, he doesn't believe in telling a lie when the truth will help the person improve.

Ivan isnt the most talkative person in the world mostly because he speaks with such a strong accent that people can barely understand him. But, he is a good listener he will listen to what others have to say and has a interest in the most odd conversations. Ivan tends to say stuff that scares or even disturb others but he is unaware of it. For example, sometimes he will talk about how he wants to torture someone and go in alot of detail about it. Ivan also doesnt understand that sometimes when he hurts someone that it is wrong, he has trouble with other people's emotions.

Ivan is pretty insane, as insane goes anyway. His insanity started when he was a child who was separated from his sisters and had to indure war after war. Pretty soon, his mentality cracked after the lost of his beloved Anastasia and he became bloodthirsty and cruel. Ivan isn't the person to anger because he has the tendency to over do his beatings and fatally wound the person. When he gets angered enough, he will chant "kolkolko" under his breath and a cold, dark aura will surround him but no matter how angry, sad, or even scary the event may seem, he keeps that kind smile playing on his lips.


Weapon: His pipe he happily named Kindness, which conventially conceals a sword.

Likes:
+Sunflowers
+Ukraine
+Vodka
+The warm
+To scare people


Dislikes:
-Belarus
-Winter
-America
-Fast food
-Poland


Strengths:
+He is phyiscal very strong
+He is a great chess player
+He has an immunity to being scared(other than with Belarus)
+He has an immunity to the cold
+He can easily scare people


Weaknesses:
-He is scared of his sister
-He acts like a child
-He has a fragile heart
-He gets angered easily
-Doesnt make friends well



Sample Post:
Ivan walked into the castle amazed at how big and wonderous it was it reminded him of the castles in fairytales. When he walked into the Great Hall with the group of other Foreigners he was amazed at how big the Great Hall was. The ceiling looked like the night sky and he felt the stares of the other students on them. When the group stopped they were in front of a chair with a hat upon it. The headmaster greeted the new arrivals and the sorting began. Name after name was called and people were put into their appropriate houses; Gryffindor, Hufflepuff, Ravenclaw, and Slytherin. His name was called up and he calmly made his way up to the chair, the hat was placed and when it spoke it shocked him.

"Hmmm... Interesting mind, you have here, Mr. Braginsky.. It seems your rather the dark fellow and you have...an interesting aura about you." The hat said. "You're also quite strong you would be great in Gryiffindor,"the hat finished.

Ivan grimaced looking at Gryiffindor he could tell just by looking that all those student were Half-Bloods and Mudbloods.

"Don't like that?... He he, well you are defiatately a Pureblood because of how you act but.. Hmm.. I guess the only choice for you would be..... SLYTHERIN."

He heard some booing and some cheering as he walked over to the Slytherin table. He knew this was going to be a VERY interesting year.


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The Player

Name: Anya or Rus whatever works for you ^J^

Timezone: GMT+3h

[Mysterious Voice]

Thank you very much for applying as Russia. While you did hit the minimum word requirements, we will unfortunately have to reject your application.

We allow some discrepancies on spelling and grammar for those who do not have English as their first language. Thus, I'm troubled more by the description of Russia's personality and the lack of depth in his character.

My greatest concern is the overly strong emphasis on Russia's tendency to lean towards violence. While it's understandable for him to be a little mentally unstable given his country's history, you're putting far too much weight on his supposed insanity and paying too little attention to other parts of his character. What about his kinder side? He can be childishly caring as much as he is childishly cruel. After all, people are complex, and nation personifications are not exempt from that generalization.

The second concern that comes to mind is how shallow his strengths and weaknesses are. They simply seem to repeat what has already been made clear in the personality section rather than offer more insight to Russia's character. I understand that he's manipulative, that he's sadistic, that he's insane and strong and a plethora of other things that really shape him out to be a villain more than a nation. What I'm looking for in those sections is not how well he can beat someone over the head with a pipe, but what either aids or handicaps him when situations become dire. Is he fast? Can he think well on his feet? Is he clumsy?

Overall, those are the issues that seemed to stand out the most. Thank you very much for your interest in joining us here at Hetalia Replay. We will be more than happy to look over your application again should you wish to address our concerns and reapply.

[vanyathesunflower]

Hello~ This is russiansunfloweer on a different account, I really want to try out this character again, I love Russia and I get the points you are telling me about and will improve on them the second time around I promise..I have never Rped on a Hetaoni site and would to start.^J^

[Mysterious Voice]

Of course! Feel free to submit another application. You have a week and two more tries (including this one).